Electric Kiss - Comments

This is dumb

PLEASE TELLME WHEN YOU ARE WRITING MORE!!!!!!!!!!

it's good but rate it r not pg-13

It's good, but that's about it. You're off to a good start, but try being more descriptive when you write so the readers can have a better understanding of the surroundings. Also don't focus too much on the romance and forget addressing other issues-like Frank and Hazel being dead.

@derpydeath101
I know this was back when I was beginning to write based on other characters. The story is rushed, inconsistent, barely had a plot and a lot of it isn't appropriate for children. If anything it was a story just cuz. But then again most authors get ideas eventually. This is a half-good story in my own opinion. Even my good ones on the website aren't that good. But yea thanks for the insight lol.

um it was good but um im just goingvto leave it at that

oK,some of the words in the story are inapropriate to children,But it's a good book!