The Rise Of The Titans Series: Kronos's Revenge (Book 1) - Comments, page 5

@Rainstar

Well, you should make a break in front of each quote, like when someone speaks it should be obvious, so you could have interchanging of dialouge:

"---"
"---"
"---"

Or you could have dialouge and a paragraph:

"---" said Matt. We followed him up on the order, anxiously awaiting our destined fate. It was up to him wheter we lived, or died, or started our lives over, for he was our only leader and the only one in control.

OR (haha lots of opitions) you could have a break in between:

"---" He answered. "---"

That's probably as clear as mud, but I hope it sort of helped. :)

@theteenagefandom
so you mean to put an space after every quotation mark?

@daughter_of_Artemis
Thanks!

@Rainstar

Yeah that's better! Try putting them arund your dialouge so it's easier to understand, like this:

"Don't tell me you're tricking us to your dad to kill us again!" Percy growled.

"Percy! The last time you met him.... He promised not to hurt you!" Nico protested.

@theteenagefandom
I don't know where is the best place to make another paragraph, though. But, i did what you said!

@Rainstar

No prob (I can't wait to read more :D)

@theteenagefandom
Thanks :)

Hi! :D

Ok let's see here...Your story is really good, like your plot is interesting and you use descriptive verbs and stuffs, so no need to change that (*grin*)

To make the story a bit easier to read, try splitting it up so it's not one huge paragraph (especially around dialogue) and check spelling/punctuation before submitting it. (OTHERWISE...It's great. *applaudes you* )

@everyone

PLEASE TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK ABOUT MY STORY

No u aren't a bad speller and the story is GREAT!!!!!!!!

am I an horrible speller?:(

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:) hope you liked it