This is really good! Just work on quotation like a previous comment said and you'll be good! This story reminded me of mine which is called Daughter of Two. XD Not the story but the part about the demigod of two gods. that pretty much it.
Interesting story idea, all I recommend is to work on your "". For instance, "POP QUIZ!" Yelled Mr. Thorn. I really think it's a good idea, so don't take my comment the wrong way. Thanks!
This is really good! Just work on quotation like a previous comment said and you'll be good! This story reminded me of mine which is called Daughter of Two. XD Not the story but the part about the demigod of two gods. that pretty much it.
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