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Honour and sacrifice - Comments
Nice idea, :) you have a good flow to things. However, I find it confusing how everything plays out. You kept switching point of views and one second Ben was knocked out and the next he was fighting again. It certainly seems exciting, but I just had to recommend that. It's kind of confusing to understand what is happening, so try re-reading it and adding more details. But good job on the story. xD
@Constrictor
Sorry I kinda thought about the "one second knocked out and the next fighting" I doesn't seem so realistic:)
2/24/15