Half Blood Hollow - Comments

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Omg, that banner XD Takes me wayyy back, Goosebumps were my first fandom

Thanks to @Chelsea_Delos for that cute new banner! I spy a little goosebumps on it!

I'm sorry I'm not as good as the others but they said there gonna help me out um so there is probably gonna be so editing so read it again sometime hopefully I will have changed it and they might have helped me out a bit thanks for the tips

Eva Taylor and Adsila Nova's characters and the first chapter need editing.

And bad grammar in the summary puts me off the story. It would be,

4 people, 4 lives, 4 stories, one ending.

I don't get much from the first chapter. It feels rushed. You gotta use more detail.