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Honour and sacrifice

Death unleashed

I squeezed my eyes shut when I saw the bomb. It sailed toward me over the tall pine trees that dominated the woods. I knew I would not survive. It exploded two feet away, and the world went dark. For good.


I comforted Phoebe as she cried into my sleeve. I couldn't believe it either. He was dead. Anger bubbled through my veins and I quietly swore vengeance for his death. After the attack, the demigods-the ones who made it out-took shelter in a small cottage about 5 kilometres away from camp half blood. Half of us probably went the exact opposite way. Of course that moment didn't last that long before our next attack.

Notes

Is this tragic enough?

Comments

@Constrictor
Sorry I kinda thought about the "one second knocked out and the next fighting" I doesn't seem so realistic:)

Nice idea, :) you have a good flow to things. However, I find it confusing how everything plays out. You kept switching point of views and one second Ben was knocked out and the next he was fighting again. It certainly seems exciting, but I just had to recommend that. It's kind of confusing to understand what is happening, so try re-reading it and adding more details. But good job on the story. xD

Constrictor Constrictor
2/24/15

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