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In One Minute

The first decision

They are sitting at the top of the hill at CHB the sun is setting over the water and the sky is filled with bright warm colours. The picnic blanket below the is soft. Percy and annabeth look at each other right in the eyes. The annabeth leans in to kiss percy for the first time. She closes her eyes and moves in closer to him. Percy is hesitant for a second as many thoughts rush through his mind. But he closes his eyes and leans in towards her. As their lips touch he can feel the softness and warmth engulf his body. Her lips taste like cherry chapstick. The kiss lasts about ten seconds and then she pulls away. They look at each other and smile.

Notes

Hey guys this is my first post, comment what you think I could improve on
~eden_delos

Comments

I can tell this is a fanfic I could get into good job keep up the good work :)

Lol...

sweetprim10 sweetprim10
12/9/17

Thank you for responding. You're literally the first active person I've met on this site.

Could you please check out my stories, and give me some feedback?

@eden_delos

eding420 eding420
9/10/17

@eding420
Thank you for the feedback, but just putting it out there all of these are going to be short as and there will be more just wait!

eden_delos eden_delos
9/8/17

This is way, way too short.

Also, please, the capitalization.

Put more passion into your writing.

Less awkward.

eding420 eding420
9/8/17