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Drew Tanaka - Comments, page 2
Another thing. I'm not sure if it's different in this fanfiction, but chat speak didn't wipe some ones memory. When you tell them to do something, you have to keep st it to make sure they keep doing it, or it'll wear off after 2 minutes, as mentioned in Blood of Olympus
Just something I thought you ought to fix.
@WeirdShyGurl
I rarely write smut but I can confidently say that the way it was depicted isn't exactly realistic. And the female anatomy here is wrong. I'm a lesbian who has sex with her girlfriend every other night and who has a friend who's a bio major. Trust me, I know.
@whynot
I guess it's fine. A little tip for writing: don't write huge paragraphs that take the whole page. Split them up into their proper paragraphs.
@ThisIsHowIRoll
I'm sorry if what I said offended you. I was just trying to speak my mind. There are lots of things that I don't see as much of a story and I understand that you have every right to an opinion.
Good luck with your story about Drew!
And once again, I'm not trying to make you angry or offend you, I'm just trying to write smut and post it so that people who want to read it can.
@QuidditchSeeker
This is basically how it works, they just finger each other and eat each other out. Trust me I know.
@whynot
But you said that there would be pointless smut after a short intro. That's not really much of a story to me.
And thank you. I wish you luck on your...story.
@ThisIsHowIRoll
Sorry to burst you're bubble but even though this is smut, it is also a legitimate story due to the fact that it tells a story.
That would be a cool idea, writing about her past I mean.
Good Luck!
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This is one of the worst Percy Jackson fanfics i've EVER read
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