The Original Character Court

[Laurel]
[Another thing. We won't be able to go ol for two weeks starting May 15 so I'll do as much as I can this week. Sorry guys. :( ]
Submitted by: I Am Aphrodite
Basics
Name: Ethic Henderson
Age: 14
Gender: Female
Birthday: March 26
Ethnicity: Haitian, African American
Hair color: Green
Eye color: Blue with Brown spots
[Less common than green eyes according to Xan but okay. By common I mean in terms of having brown spots and all. Yeah. Sorry, I'm awkward *_* ]
Height: 4" 6'
[Um... It's supposed to be written as 4'6" :) ]
Weight: 80 lbs.
[Damn this girl is tiny! She's smaller than me!]
Other physical descriptions: She has a magical tattoo of a glittering snake inside a golden heart. Even though, with the help of Hecate, her mother's curse was broken, she was still born with snakes for hair. The snakes don't bite, and they alone can't turn people to stone. Her skin is steel, like her mother's skin used to be. Her only weak spot is her neck which has skin of a mortal. Her skin looks normal, like the skin of a mortal or demigod.
[Wait what? No. Sorry. Medusa can't have kids. Just no. She'll turn the dude into a snake before they can even frick frack. So sorry. I can't accept the parentage. :( ]

Personality
Positive traits: She is a great listener, for she often talks to her godmother Hecate, seeking advice for her problems with school, home, and herself; she will listen to anyone's problems, as long as you won't lie or if your not a demigod.
[Sorry, honey, I doubt mortals would talk to her. :( ]

Negative traits: She is very judgemental, and a spaz. When something goes wrong no matter how large or small she freaks out. If it's big, she may stop breathing for a short amount of time.

For instance, once she had found out that she had failed a test, and for the rest of the day, she was freaking out about possibilities for her future that could be ruined by this. Like the failed grade going on her report card and her permanent record, and her getting held back and not getting into college.

[Sorry, honey. I don't think she can go to school with mortal kids given... yeah. You can say "oh! There's the mist!" But there will be mortals who can see through it. :( ]

Fears/Phobias: She is afraid of her friend, Ashley because she is a shapeshifter. [what? Please go into detail about what kind of shapeshifter because what you're thinking might not be acceptable in Greek/Roman mythology.] She is afraid that one day Ashley may turn into her godmother, Hecate, and trick her into telling her secrets. [That kind of shapeshifter? No. Not acceptable. I'm sorry. They shouldn't be able to turn into the gods.] She is also claustrophobic, and its afraid of being alone with her mother, because she doesn't like to talk to her. Her mother makes her uncomfortable, and her mother's snakes always seem to be watching her.

Fatal Flaw: Her fatal flaw, quoted from a conversation she had with Hecate, is this, "I fear that I have trapped myself in a world that I cannot escape from. For I am no longer a perfectionist, and I no longer seek to please my peers to the highest extent. But I cannot change my reputation as the perfect girl in everyone's eyes. I am doomed with the world I have created."
[what?]

Family and Background
Godly Parent: Medusa
[Medusa is not a god. She's a monster. She really wouldn't be able to have kids. I'm pretty sure one of the curses (besides the obvious) Athena gave her was to make her unable to bear children.]
Mortal Parent: Gorge Henderson
Other relationships: This is a very long list (about 21 people), and I do not want to waste your time explaining them all. Also by explaining them hear, I would lose many chapters of my story.
[Explain the relevant ones. The ones who actually affect her like the shape shifting friend..]
Backstory:
I was born on March twenty sixth, two thousand one. I was born in an old temple to Hecate, because Hecate favored my family, and all children of monsters were born in her temples. Of course, this was in secret. As she always did Hecate blessed the girl. But she saw potential and found her interesting, so she agreed to become her godmother.

When I was three, I could walk,talk, dress myself, and tie my shoes. I was then taught how to read by my aunt, who was still under the curse, because each of the three sisters had to brake the curse separately. Unfortunately, my other aunt was killed before she could break it. Then, when I was four, Hecate had her most trusted follower, Katherine, teach me Greek mythology, and basic mortal studies.

When I turned eleven, I was allowed to go to a boarding school for girls in Manahattan, where I met Annabeth Chase, my enemy.

(The rest must be kept secret because it is partial to the development of the story.)
[no. I'm usually nicer than Kara but just no.]

Combat-related questions
Camp: None
Weapon of choice: I only use weapons if there is life threading danger, then I use my powers, which are explained next.
[WHAT WEAPONS. I DON'T CARE WHEN YOU USE THE WEAPONS. I WANT TO KNOW WHAT WEAPONS YOU ACTUALLY USE.]
Powers and Abilities: Like my mother used to be able to do, I can turn people to stone. But, since my mother's curse was broken, it's only temporary. It lasts for twenty four hours and doesn't hurt. While they're stone, they are oblivious to everything around them, and cannot hear or see or talk.

Also, I am in the process of learning how to control the mist, to make my life better, with my looks and the envirnment around me.

Comments: 1) Medusa's kid: no. 2) Personality: not explained enough and fatal flaw was ??? Don't just quote your character. You as the author, need to be able to explain what it is. I'm okay with character quotes if the quote can speak for itself but the quote you gave just made me think ??? 3) Backstory: no.

Final judgement: Fields of Punishment

Notes

If anybody else is going to criticize make sure you give comments on how to improve and don't just bash.