green lanterns and demigods.

Gagyyyy price of shhhit

Try using punctuation marks at the right place and please be mindful of your capitalization.
Ex.: "This is Green Lantern Mike Astera of Sector 2814," I said.
Try correcting your grammar.

This story is nice though.

I have a few suggestions. Try capatilizing the title, not that I'm a Grammer Nazi or anything... *cough, cough* Also, try working on the chapter length and Grammer. When your chapter is a paragraph long, you know you went wrong. You need tons of details, paint a picture in the readers mind. And keep the ratings in mind. If you rate this R then it's for 17+. However reading through this, I think it'd probably be a PG-13 or less. Never give up though, and do your best.

So what do you guys think any suggestions how to spice thing up.