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I'm skipping the review part today kids! Sorry :/


Ok Nisha here's the deal:


PLOT PLOT PLOT!

I don't understand at all what's going on. I figured out that Nisha has the ability to transport into books when she touches them. But it's very confusing, I hardly know what is going on and when. This also would fall into the "Be more descriptive" category. But the plot seems like it isn't fully developed yet and it's weak. So what I would do is just start thinking about the plot: If the story ends up being as useless as a lamp: ditch it, or figure out a way to apply it to a different story. But figure out the goal for the story, and why Nisha is trapped in a book.

Slow Down!
In this you sound like you hurry along, and the reader is caught up in a whirlwind called "Knowledge is Power Right?" being more descriptive can help. Yes things happen fast and more a first person story it can actually help when the character is completely confused or things are happening really fast, but it's not good when it happens through the whole story. Try this: Think that your story is a movie, and try to tell your story as if it was: make the reader see what you see.

Signing off

Eliza Rush

Notes

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@Nisha Di Angelo please if you have any questions or comments please let me know!