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Reveiw:

Can I just say? ACTION, ACTION, ACTION, romance, ACTION, ACTION, ACTION!
Can you tell I loved the action? Haha Lol. So if you want a story full of action, (cough cough) and (cough) romance (cough cough) then I highly recommend this story! Whoo hoo! GO ROMANS! (Yes I favor the Romans over the Greeks: *put on shades* deal with it)

All in all this story deserves a 6.5
LOVED the action! Good Job!


Suggestions (enter at your rise of spoilers!) :


Hey Persassy (hope you like the nickname lolz) I enjoyed reading your story! But there are somethings that you can work on for future stories!




Plot: You did a hop skip through the story and then had a detour with finding the finding of the fountain of youth. It was kinda confusing and action practically in every chapter. This could fall under the "be more descriptive" category but also pace yourself when writing your stories, just make sure you don't make to boring lol! But you do fall under "Be more descriptive category" when things are embarrassing or funny or even sensitive help me understand what's going on in the character's head.


Characters: Oh my gosh did you have a guy for Reyna? Ok here's the thing you had Reyna purrrfect in the first chapter then in the rest of the story she seemed like she was a younger self than the Reyna that we have in the series. You got to remember that Reyna has lived long enough to be scarred, and she'd basically been denied by Percy and Jason (basically) but remember she has wounds and Isaac needs to help Reyna overcome them. Not all characters are perfect, nobody's perfect is real life so having people overcoming things (ex.) Reyna overcoming heartbreak: Man that would be so touching! (tears!)


SO yeah you can apply the suggestions to your new stories.

Notes

IF YOU WANT YOUR STORIES REVEIWED PLEASE LET ME KNOW. Also understand it will be a while! I'm going to slow the reveiws down (other stories need to be done! lolz) But I will do my best in getting it done!

@That_Dam_Persassy if you have any questions or comments do not be afraid to tell me!