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Whoo how reveiw (hey guys missed you lol):

So this is a good story if you like romance, and drama (for me personally too much! lol :) ) This story right now in time is promising a good adventure and action. And I can't wait for the new stuff. Minor grammar mistakes, some character issues, but all in all a pretty good story!

Rating: 7!


Suggestions (enter at your own risk of possible spoilers):



Alrrrriggghtttyyy I know Lexy that you've been waiting for this review and I'm sorry for the wait!

But I'll be right quick!

- it feels really slow.
In the beginning there are so many chapters and they are pretty long and there isn't anything really hinting that she's a demigod. Maybe for like your next story have an annoying person that she either has met or it's just a stranger. Hint that there's something else going on if you plan on going for a long introduction, so that people can get hooked on it.
Also you reaallly have a tendency to drag things out, I reeaaaalllllyyy want some action here!

-The Cannon characters Don't Seem Like Themselves
*cannon meaning official Rick Riordan characters* Characters like Zeus and Percy are messed up. Percy is madly in love with Annabeth! Zeus isn't exactly the loving father character lol.

-Watch out for grammar!
You're did better as you went along but I would suggest is fix your earlier chapters so that when you get new readers they'll be able to understand your story and want to stay reading it.

That is all...

Eliza Rush :)

Notes

Hey guys if you want your story reviewed please be aware it WILL be slow espesically depending on the length of your story. I will do my best! Let me know and I'll work on it as soon as I can!