Help Corner!

Review:

Great story all around! Again (she said pick one so I did and I happened to randomly choose the one that's the newest lol) this story in the beginning stages and I love what's going on here and that Sam's earlier stories intertwine with this one. So read the earlier stuff so you can understand it completely!
Story gets a rating a good rating of 6.5



Suggestions (i love saying this) if you are not the writer (Sam Harper) then you are at risk of spoilers!:


Ok: So here's the deal the thing that is holding you back from getting a higher rating on this story is because of lack of description. Personally I'll feel for the character more if you describe her more. Her likes, dislikes, general life, and emotions better in different situations.

Also be more generally descriptive in the story itself; try to paint a picture for me like I'm blind and I need you to describe what's going on and with the characters that you introduce!

There are slight grammar and spelling mistakes so watch out for those and you'll be on your way!

Also just a side note: Do you think the cover photo of your story represents the story really well and draws people in? Personally find something that makes people want to click your story: like for this one try to find something that would fit the story line.

All in all try a little harder with describing things cause you really bounce everywhere because of it!

Signing Off,
Eliza Rush

Notes

Whew sorry peeps that's it's taking so long! I'm trying to juggle stuff and I forgot to do this! XD I'll try and post a thing each week, but as summer starts picking up I might be able to do more! Love you guys!