Reviews and Recommendations

Okay, BEFORE I START....When I review, I give you a certain number of points out of ten on subjects that I think are critical to the story. After I complete giving you points, I take them and average them out, and that's the rating that I give your story. If you fix what I point out, and I find it to be satisfactory to MY taste, I'll come back and edit the review and boot your points up so you have a better rating. Needless to say, I don't hold back from my opinions, so if I offend you, I apologize in advance. Just realize I am entitled to my own opinion, and if you aren't satisfied with what I have to say, I'm sorry.

Okay, SO. ChildOfNike asked me to review her story. Here you go:

Camp Half-Blood

I really liked your story; I found it to be enjoyable (minus a few grammatical errors and trip-ups) but I think your thoughts are solid and heading in the right direction, for the most part.

So, POINTS!

Cover picture, Characters, and Summary – 8.5
Everything that you had was good – cover photo (CHECK!) Good summary – needs a little improving (CHECK) and your character list seemed complete.

Plot - 10
It’s new, it’s creative, it’s different, it’s a twist off the usual!

Chapter Length/Content - 8
Your chapters were an average length, if not a little short, so I would suggest just boosting up the length slightly. J

Basic Editing Skills – 5Check your capitalization, punctuation, and spelling for little errors! There weren’t many.

Overall Grammatical Structure –5
You divided it up into paragraphs and you used dialogue spaces (which is AWESOME). Just try and watch how you word things so they aren’t too confusing and again, like I said above, basic grammar editing. J

Descriptive Elements - 7
Set the scene! Just throw in a few adjectives here and there so I can see and understand what the place you’re writing about looks like.

My Comprehension – 10
I understood what was going on (That’s good) but set the scene and describe a little more to make it more interesting! J

Okay, so the rating for this story is...7.7 Good job!

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