The Original Character Court
Elaine 'Ellie' Carter
Basics
Name: Elaine 'Ellie' Carter
Age: 14-15
Gender: Female
Birthday: 8th April 2000
Ethnicity: British, but lost the accent as she and her dad moved to America
[when?]
Hair color: Bleached blond
Eye color: grey
Other physical descriptions: Kind of tanned
Height: 5'5
Weight: 55kg
Sexual orientation: straight
[heterosexual]
Personality
Positive traits:
She is confident, and not afraid to speak out about herself, after a bit of thinking about it, of course.
She is brave, like all demigods [latter part is unnecessary. And not all demigods are brave]
She is good at Maths, English, Science, Geography and Liberal Studies. [this isn't a personality trait.]
Negative traits:
She is really persistent about her opinion, and doesn't like other people correcting her.
Her pet peeve is bad grammar, pronunciation and spelling.
Fears/Phobias: Arachnophobia, need I say more?
[Could you not make that comment? Saying 'need I say more' was unnecessary.]
Fatal Flaw: Hubris, as seen in her Negative traits
Family and Background:
Godly parent: Athena
Mortal parent:Mike Carter
Other relationships:
Boyfriend-Victor Matthews (son of Zeus), they met each other in the orphanage
[not liking the fact that there's another son of Zeus but I'm not judging that OC]
Ian Page (son of Hephaestus)- Adopted brother
[They were adopted together?]
Apollo (yes, the god.)- Paternal Grandfather
[Is there another Apollo? So she's a legacy of Apollo and a Daughter of Athena.]
Backstory: She was attacked by monsters at about 6-7, and when her father found out she was a demigod, he was really crazy [You mean, "he went really crazy"] because there were two demigods in the same house, [That's supposed to be a period.] She eventually ran away when she decided her dad was finally nuts, and she landed in the orphanage.
She didn't like the orphanage at all, not a single bit of it. after years and years of being tormented at the orphanage, she decided to run away with Victor and Ian. After five months of running and hiding from monsters, Coach Hedge found them while he was patrolling the park for tin cans (don't ask)and brought them to Camp Half-Blood.
[Her mom was Athena. How did Mike not know? Remember, Athena's kids spring out from her forehead. It also means that no sexual intercourse occurred. Furthermore, Mike's a demigod himself and Athena isn't exactly the most subtle goddess.]
Combat-related questions
Camp: Half-Blood
Other weapons: a really thin celestial bronze dagger that she can easily hide in her bag after sheathed
[*when sheathed]
Powers and Abilities:
High IQ, need I say more [Seriously, saying "need I say more" is really irritating. Could you not do that?]
Persuasion, she has a great way with words and logic
Comments:
Not enough in the personality. It's pretty generic. Backstory has a lot of loopholes. Physical description is pretty sound.
Final Judgment: Fields of Asphodel
Name: Elaine 'Ellie' Carter
Age: 14-15
Gender: Female
Birthday: 8th April 2000
Ethnicity: British, but lost the accent as she and her dad moved to America
[when?]
Hair color: Bleached blond
Eye color: grey
Other physical descriptions: Kind of tanned
Height: 5'5
Weight: 55kg
Sexual orientation: straight
[heterosexual]
Personality
Positive traits:
She is confident, and not afraid to speak out about herself, after a bit of thinking about it, of course.
She is brave, like all demigods [latter part is unnecessary. And not all demigods are brave]
She is good at Maths, English, Science, Geography and Liberal Studies. [this isn't a personality trait.]
Negative traits:
She is really persistent about her opinion, and doesn't like other people correcting her.
Her pet peeve is bad grammar, pronunciation and spelling.
Fears/Phobias: Arachnophobia, need I say more?
[Could you not make that comment? Saying 'need I say more' was unnecessary.]
Fatal Flaw: Hubris, as seen in her Negative traits
Family and Background:
Godly parent: Athena
Mortal parent:Mike Carter
Other relationships:
Boyfriend-Victor Matthews (son of Zeus), they met each other in the orphanage
[not liking the fact that there's another son of Zeus but I'm not judging that OC]
Ian Page (son of Hephaestus)- Adopted brother
[They were adopted together?]
Apollo (yes, the god.)- Paternal Grandfather
[Is there another Apollo? So she's a legacy of Apollo and a Daughter of Athena.]
Backstory: She was attacked by monsters at about 6-7, and when her father found out she was a demigod, he was really crazy [You mean, "he went really crazy"] because there were two demigods in the same house, [That's supposed to be a period.] She eventually ran away when she decided her dad was finally nuts, and she landed in the orphanage.
She didn't like the orphanage at all, not a single bit of it. after years and years of being tormented at the orphanage, she decided to run away with Victor and Ian. After five months of running and hiding from monsters, Coach Hedge found them while he was patrolling the park for tin cans (don't ask)and brought them to Camp Half-Blood.
[Her mom was Athena. How did Mike not know? Remember, Athena's kids spring out from her forehead. It also means that no sexual intercourse occurred. Furthermore, Mike's a demigod himself and Athena isn't exactly the most subtle goddess.]
Combat-related questions
Camp: Half-Blood
Other weapons: a really thin celestial bronze dagger that she can easily hide in her bag after sheathed
[*when sheathed]
Powers and Abilities:
High IQ, need I say more [Seriously, saying "need I say more" is really irritating. Could you not do that?]
Persuasion, she has a great way with words and logic
Comments:
Not enough in the personality. It's pretty generic. Backstory has a lot of loopholes. Physical description is pretty sound.
Final Judgment: Fields of Asphodel
I am SO sorry for your loss. I havent lost too many people in my life, but i have lost enough to know its a horrible thing to go through. Are you going to continue The Original Character Court without her?
5/15/16