The Original Character Court
Robin Maclanan
Basics
Name: Robin Maclanan
Age: 14
Gender: Female
Birthday: August 5th
Ethnicity: Irish
Hair color: Auburn
Eye color: Olive, (brownish green)
Height: 5'2 (in feet)
[(Proper notation is (foot)'(inches)". And since you used that, saying (in feet) was unnecessary]
Weight: 119
[How come this one has no unit?]
Other physical descriptions: Athletic, carved body type. ["carved" isn't a body type. It's a description.] Sturdy and flexible
Has a dream catcher painted on her arm, and she fills it in with paint whenever needed to remind her of her mother.
Sexual orientation: Heterosexual
Personality
Positive traits: Free Spirited. She's lived in ireland for the majority of her life, and always had open space and wooded areas.
She is very imaginative, and had a lot of trouble in school because she always would be daydreaming.
Negative traits: Robin cam be very pushy and impatient, and hates It. She hates it. [unnecessary repetition but I'll let that pass.]
She also can be humiliated very easy, so mist times she misses out on good things because of this.
Other Personality traits: She reads. A whole lot.
Fears/Phobias: Claustraphobic. She's lived 'out' much more than in.
[So she's used to open spaces. Okay, I get it.]
Fatal Flaw: Robins fatal flaw is Her tenancy [tendency] to compare herself to others.
She discovered this during the chariot race at CHB. [those were cancelled] She had designed a beautiful chariot that held all the things she loved and made it to be smooth and simple.
Then she saw the competitiors designs.
They were just so good...and she ended up quitting after pushing herself way over the limit, trying to be just like the others.
Family and Background
Godly Parent: Iris
Mortal Parent: Colin Maclanan.
Other relationships: Silas Porticoll, son of Apollo. She has a impossible crush on the guy.
Butch. Its a love hate relationship being related.... [true]
Annika Ponmier, daughter of Hebe. They are good friends.
[A little more about how their relationships developed would've been nice. Like I keep repeating, if you want examples, please see the OCs listed in "Isles of the Blessed."
Backstory: Robin was born in Ireland, her homeland.
She grew up in a secluded town with her Dad, Colin.
Growing up, she became in love with Archery after receiving a bow as a gift on her eighth birthday. They lived on a small farm, which is where she picked up her compassion for animals.
But then, one day, she was going on a trail ride when a big old harpy attacked. Terrified, she was badly injured, and after recovering her dad was to scared, and sent her to camp half blood, fearing for his daughter.
She went to Camp Half Blood, and was Claimed when she painted the Iris cabin secretly, yet bbeautifully.
[how did no one notice her painting the Iris cabin?]
[And backstory seems pretty thin but okay.]
Combat-related questions
Camp: Camp Halfblood
Weapon of choice: A bow, which she calls ShalottE [why?]
this is the same bow she got when she was eight, so it isn't the greatest weapon ever. her cleverness succeeds though, which is good, she fights with agility, and sooner or later knows she will need to go weapon shopping.
[Weapon shopping? Really? You know CHB has a weapons shed, right? And a bow-and-arrow is a great weapon. 'Agility' is also better for close-ranged fighters.]
Powers and Abilities: Robin can generate rainbows, like her siblings. She also can move certain forces of light, small fractals of Light.
She has a good sense of color.
[okay acceptable.]
Comments:
Well, the character was, um... Well there wasn't enough detail. Not that good, but not that bad.
Final judgement: Fields of Asphodel
Name: Robin Maclanan
Age: 14
Gender: Female
Birthday: August 5th
Ethnicity: Irish
Hair color: Auburn
Eye color: Olive, (brownish green)
Height: 5'2 (in feet)
[(Proper notation is (foot)'(inches)". And since you used that, saying (in feet) was unnecessary]
Weight: 119
[How come this one has no unit?]
Other physical descriptions: Athletic, carved body type. ["carved" isn't a body type. It's a description.] Sturdy and flexible
Has a dream catcher painted on her arm, and she fills it in with paint whenever needed to remind her of her mother.
Sexual orientation: Heterosexual
Personality
Positive traits: Free Spirited. She's lived in ireland for the majority of her life, and always had open space and wooded areas.
She is very imaginative, and had a lot of trouble in school because she always would be daydreaming.
Negative traits: Robin cam be very pushy and impatient, and hates It. She hates it. [unnecessary repetition but I'll let that pass.]
She also can be humiliated very easy, so mist times she misses out on good things because of this.
Other Personality traits: She reads. A whole lot.
Fears/Phobias: Claustraphobic. She's lived 'out' much more than in.
[So she's used to open spaces. Okay, I get it.]
Fatal Flaw: Robins fatal flaw is Her tenancy [tendency] to compare herself to others.
She discovered this during the chariot race at CHB. [those were cancelled] She had designed a beautiful chariot that held all the things she loved and made it to be smooth and simple.
Then she saw the competitiors designs.
They were just so good...and she ended up quitting after pushing herself way over the limit, trying to be just like the others.
Family and Background
Godly Parent: Iris
Mortal Parent: Colin Maclanan.
Other relationships: Silas Porticoll, son of Apollo. She has a impossible crush on the guy.
Butch. Its a love hate relationship being related.... [true]
Annika Ponmier, daughter of Hebe. They are good friends.
[A little more about how their relationships developed would've been nice. Like I keep repeating, if you want examples, please see the OCs listed in "Isles of the Blessed."
Backstory: Robin was born in Ireland, her homeland.
She grew up in a secluded town with her Dad, Colin.
Growing up, she became in love with Archery after receiving a bow as a gift on her eighth birthday. They lived on a small farm, which is where she picked up her compassion for animals.
But then, one day, she was going on a trail ride when a big old harpy attacked. Terrified, she was badly injured, and after recovering her dad was to scared, and sent her to camp half blood, fearing for his daughter.
She went to Camp Half Blood, and was Claimed when she painted the Iris cabin secretly, yet bbeautifully.
[how did no one notice her painting the Iris cabin?]
[And backstory seems pretty thin but okay.]
Combat-related questions
Camp: Camp Halfblood
Weapon of choice: A bow, which she calls ShalottE [why?]
this is the same bow she got when she was eight, so it isn't the greatest weapon ever. her cleverness succeeds though, which is good, she fights with agility, and sooner or later knows she will need to go weapon shopping.
[Weapon shopping? Really? You know CHB has a weapons shed, right? And a bow-and-arrow is a great weapon. 'Agility' is also better for close-ranged fighters.]
Powers and Abilities: Robin can generate rainbows, like her siblings. She also can move certain forces of light, small fractals of Light.
She has a good sense of color.
[okay acceptable.]
Comments:
Well, the character was, um... Well there wasn't enough detail. Not that good, but not that bad.
Final judgement: Fields of Asphodel
I am SO sorry for your loss. I havent lost too many people in my life, but i have lost enough to know its a horrible thing to go through. Are you going to continue The Original Character Court without her?
5/15/16