The Original Character Court

[Hi guys! It's Laurel! I'm back! Sorry. I was having much needed quality time with my girlfriend because she has way too much thirst. She's so possessive. :) Anyway, I'm here with another review!]

Basics
Name: Jade Walker
[It's more commonly a girl's name from what I've checked but I think it can also be a boy's name. Anyway, proceed!]
Age: 14
Gender: Male
Ethnicity: American,native american,and African american
[I'm slightly confused but I will keep my judgment on this on hold]
Hair color: Blond
[But he's native American and/or African American? Again, on hold. Will just this again after the backstory, okay?]
Eye color: Grey-Blue
Height: 5 foot 3 inches
Weight: 75
[Why don't people put the weight units?! Whyyyyyy?!]
[Do you mean pounds or kilograms? If it's in pounds, he's very underweight. If it's in kilograms, he's very overweight.]
Other physical descriptions: Is agile and lean and has a scar across his left eye [cliche but hopefully this is explained.]
Sexual orientation: Straight
[We'd really rather that you say heterosexual.]

Personality
Positive traits: Is kind and positive and loyal and will always create positive attitude
[you can't create a positive attitude. I myself am a really optimistic person but that can't make my grumpy cynical girlfriend as cheery as I am, unfortunately.]

Negative traits: Gets angry when irritated or friends are hurt or killed. [Well, if you're friend is hurt or killed, you'd obviously get angry! You can get rid of that part.]
Is overreactive [okay how?

[Your personality traits are looking a bit thin. They're super generic.]

Fears/Phobias: Arachnophobic
[I'm assuming this is an Athena kid.]

Fatal Flaw: Very proud when accomplishing a task and is extremely loyal
(don't hate on this because it copies both annabeth's and Percy's fatal flaws)
[I'm not hating on this because of the reason you mentioned. I find it iffy because
1) Being proud when accomplishing a task isn't a fatal flaw.
2) Can you explain the whole "is extremely loyal" part? Like, what's the extent of his loyalty?]

Family and Background
Godly Parent: Athena
Mortal Parent: Douglas Walker
Backstory: Father is a computer science teacher and and he has always shown a love of computers but when he creates a computer that somehow hacks into the god's internet endless monsters try to get their hands on the computer so he has to go to Camp Half-Blood to avoid the monsters and continue developing the computer.
[WHAT. No. Somehow hacks into? No. Just no. He's mortal. No. I can't even. :( Sorry. This is no.]

Combat-related questions
Camp: Half-Blood
Weapon of choice: Twin Half Stygian iron half celestial bronze daggers
[This boy is an Athena kid. He can't handle a Stygian Iron blade. That's exclusively for kids of Hades/Pluto or similar!]
Powers and Abilities: Intelligent and can hack into technology with his mind by accessing the intelligence database of the technology.
[Demigods aren't allowed near technology. This is a no. Hack with his mind? Overpowered too! This is a disaster waiting to happen!]

Comments:
Like I said, a disaster waiting to happen. The backstory doesn't explain the Native American African-American yada-yada. I'm just over here like "you say what now?" Also, you do know that the reason why Athena kids are blonde is because their mortal parent is blonde, right? The weapon and the abilities are a no-go as well! And the whole "hack into the gods' internet"?! What?! In your physical description, IDK if he's underweight or overweight because you didn't put units. The scar also wasn't explained. As the creator of this, you need to know how he got the scar. It can't just be "Oh! I'm gonna give my character this scar because IT LOOKS SO TOTALLY AWESOME." Oh and your personality traits. If you need help, we have another thing with references and character advice. And, if you look at the chapter entitled "The Judgments so far" (I suggest looking at the one with (2)), you'll see the characters placed in Isles of the Blessed and Elysium. I suggest you give those characters a look so you'll get an idea of what we consider good characters.

Oh! Another thing. It doesn't hurt to look at the character descriptions in the Camp Half-blood wiki Though, the ones there might not be as descriptive since the people who go there are usually the ones who already read the book.

Final judgement: Tartarus

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