Reviews and Recommendations

Okay, BEFORE I START....When I review, I give you a certain number of points out of ten on subjects that I think are critical to the story. After I complete giving you points, I take them and average them out, and that's the rating that I give your story. If you fix what I point out, and I find it to be satisfactory to MY taste, I'll come back and edit the review and boot your points up so you have a better rating. Needless to say, I don't hold back from my opinions, so if I offend you, I apologize in advance. Just realize I am entitled to my own opinion, and if you aren't satisfied with what I have to say, I'm sorry.

Crystalline Melodies

It was your banner that had originally caught my eye, so kudos on that. The unique name also was intriguing, so I clicked through and started reading. It was excellent!
So, POINTS!

Cover picture, Characters, and Summary – 9.5
You have a great cover photo, and your characters are wonderfully bulked out with information and photos. Your summary was thorough and well written, but one clump of words.

Plot - 10
I love the way you jump back and forth from present to past in your plotline. It reminds me of one of my favorite book series, plus it gives character development.

Chapter Length/Content - 10
Perfect length, and it’s a great idea to accompany your chapters with a song. You have a considerable amount of character development in the first chapter than I have seen other people achieve, so nice job there. I would suggest you break the chapters up a little bit so you don’t completely overwhelm your readers, but in my opinion the length is perfect.

Basic Editing Skills – 10
PFFT. You’re FINE.

Overall Grammatical Structure – 9.5
You have the occasional typo. I think that is literally it. The only other suggestion I have is to stop starting your paragraphs with “I guess” or “I heft” or “I brush” or “I limp”. After just skimming over chapter two, my eye picked up on that and it happened a lot and weakens your story element a little bit.

Descriptive Elements - 10
Again. You’re fine. Wonderfully done. Nice use of big words. *applause*

My Comprehension – 10
Perfect. I understood what you did and exactly where you wanted to direct me as a reader.

Okay, so the rating for this story is...9.8!
<3 Echo

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