Reviews and Recommendations

Okay, BEFORE I START....When I review, I give you a certain number of points out of ten on subjects that I think are critical to the story. After I complete giving you points, I take them and average them out, and that's the rating that I give your story. If you fix what I point out, and I find it to be satisfactory to MY taste, I'll come back and edit the review and boot your points up so you have a better rating. Needless to say, I don't hold back from my opinions, so if I offend you, I apologize in advance. Just realize I am entitled to my own opinion, and if you aren't satisfied with what I have to say, I'm sorry.

Stacy Pendragon – Daughter of the Sea
I know Torissa made your banner, and that was an eye catcher, so thanks for asking her to do that for you!
So, POINTS!

Cover picture, Characters, and Summary – 6
You have a great cover photo, obviously, but your summary and your characters need to be a little bit bulked out. I wouldn’t add canon characters to your list, because everyone already knows Percy and Annabeth, etc.

Plot - 7
It’s a different version of something that is overused to a certain extent, so add in some plot twists to change it up a little. There are a lot of sisters of Percy.

Chapter Length/Content – 5.5
You have a few chapters that are really short and really long, so split it up a little to keep a general length.

Basic Editing Skills – 3
Capitalization not done where needed and done where its not needed, misuse of commas and general punctuation. Needs a little bit of fixing up here.

Overall Grammatical Structure – 5
Watch your basics, and then, try to add in hard returns (enter button) after dialogue so it’s easier to read, and also your verb tense strays from present to past occasionally. Split up your paragraphs into smaller bits so it’s easier to read.

Descriptive Elements – 6.5
You use good descriptive words, they’re just sometimes misplaced or hard to understand what you’re describing in the masses of text you give the reader.

My Comprehension – 7
I understood the story, but it was a little difficult to follow the talking and the events due to misuse of hard returns.

Okay, so the rating for this story is...5.7!
<3 Echo

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