Reviews and Recommendations

Okay, BEFORE I START....When I review, I give you a certain number of points out of ten on subjects that I think are critical to the story. After I complete giving you points, I take them and average them out, and that's the rating that I give your story. If you fix what I point out, and I find it to be satisfactory to MY taste, I'll come back and edit the review and boot your points up so you have a better rating. Needless to say, I don't hold back from my opinions, so if I offend you, I apologize in advance. Just realize I am entitled to my own opinion, and if you aren't satisfied with what I have to say, I'm sorry.

Okay, SO. The Fright of the Gods AKA Lea Reclin asked me to review her stories. Here you go:

I know your stories, I’ve read most of them actually, so I’m just going to put my summary of your stories here before both of them: You’re a very talented author and I really like how you plan out your plot and you usually don’t have plot holes like many of us do (me included...:P) and you keep your characters alive and real, but with a humorous side. You capture Rick’s writing style a little bit, which is what I think makes fanfic (even though yours isn’t...technically...not? exactly?) the best.

Prime

Cover picture, Characters, and Summary – 8.0
You had everything, but your banner is average and your characters aren’t really...described, per say. Your summary is very good and I wish more people had ones like that. Bonus points for your soundtrack and audio book.

Plot – 10.0
I’m doing this because I really feel that your plot is exceptionally good for being heavily inspired by PJO and I really like what you’re doing with it.

Chapter Length/Content – 9.5
Fine except that they’re one mass of text. Break it up a little – and like, by that I mean make completely new paragraphs.

Basic Editing Skills – 10.0
Fine fine :)

Overall Grammatical Structure – 9.0
I’m not going to go too in depth because in terms of fan fic you have an excellent one, because many of them have terrible grammar. I’m being a little hard (ish) because I think you’re talented enough that you can use literary tools to your advantage and make what you have better than great – look a little into how you can use personification and stuff like that to your advantage. You don’t have to though – I think you’re fine as it is. I’m just throwing that in there if you want to make it amazing, stupendous, perfect, etc.

Descriptive Elements – 9.0
Pfft you’re fine...if anything I’d just refer back to what I just said.

My Comprehension – 10.0
I understood what was going on. That is literally my criteria for this section. *applause*

Okay, so the rating for this story is...9.4 Good job!

Spliced
Cover picture, Characters, and Summary – 8.5
You had everything...again, and your banner is a little better than the other one. Characters – still aren’t really...described. Your summary is very good as per usual.

Plot – 10.0
((See previous))

Chapter Length/Content – 9.0
((See previous))

Basic Editing Skills – 10.0
Fine :))))

Overall Grammatical Structure – 9.0
((See previous))

Descriptive Elements – 9.5
I actually think you did a better job in this second one than you did your first and I’m really impressed. I think that is a maturing of the author, though, so kudos.

My Comprehension – 10.0
Obvious.

Okay, so the rating for this story is...9.6 Good job! (No, really. Good job.)
<3

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