Queen Reviews
Child of Athena
Plot- The idea for the plot is amazing, I congratulate you on using something that's been used before but making it your own thing.
It's a little too slow paced for my taste, and maybe you could make the chapters bigger? (If you want to of course).
I give the main plot about 7.5/10 because there is room for improvment.
Characters- Let's start with the main Character: Sophie.
She is a very quiet girl that sticks to herself and does her own thing, is it me or does every fanfiction on this site have either that kind of character, or a very loud arrogant character as their main?.
Yet in this story you manage to change that by giving her a chance to grow and from chapter I you see her starting to move out of her comfort zone.
You seem to capture the Original cast pretty well too, so... POINTS TO THAT!.
Not many other OCs I know very well yet to review, I'd like to see more of Malcolm being a protective brother and not an annoying character reminds me of my brother.
I want to see more OCs in your story because you have a talent in creating Characters.
So I give the characters an 8.5/10
Grammar- Once again I don't rememember seeing any grammar mistakes (This is the gazillionth time I'm writing this and I have not read your book in a while...)
So grammar gets a 10/10
Over all I give an 8/10, and you can expect to see me commenting on your story.
Name: Alexandra Orlova
Story Description: Alexandra is an Exorcist (demigod who works in the Underworld). She wakes up after a horrible fight which she doesn't remember and finds herself in Camp Half-Blood.
Link: http://www.percyjacksonfanfiction.com/Story/84022/Alexandra-Orlova/
How many stars would you give it?: A solid 8.5
Did you read the rules?: I wouldn't be writing this form if I hadn't
Have or will you read any other reviews?: Sure, why not?
Password: Vanilla (I hope it is not wrong)
OK... Just so you know, I tend to avoid doing spelling errors, but there might be one that I missed, so sorry in advance.
Hope I impress you or something and that you're still active on this site
11/26/16