Basics
Name: Jennie Clark
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Birthday: April 1
Ethnicity: Canadian-Faint french accent
Hair color: Light blonde and in direct sunlight it can be often confused as platinum blonde
[That does happen]
Eye color: Violet, one eye is lighter than the other. This mutation in eye color happened due to the godly gene in her cells. (yay, research!)
Height: 1.62 m
Weight: 56 kg
Other physical descriptions: Has a scar going across her left cheek-bone, got it in the car crash that killed her step-mom Kira.
Various scars and scabs on her arms and hands from training in camp Half-blood.
Small barely visible freckles on her nose, and a mole just above her right eyebrow.
Has strong and muscular legs, big hips, and a small chest area.
[well, they make sense especially the latter part.]
Sexual orientation: Homosexual
[Hello representation. It's always nice to see you.]

Godly parent: Hecate
Mortal parent: Doug Clark
Other relationships:

• Step-Mom: Kira Clark (Maiden name Kira Li).
  
• Friends: Alexia her camp-half blood friend, daughter of Tyche, she met her when they were teamed up to spar against each other, Alexia lost.
• Will Solace met him before she raced against him in a canoe race, she also by accidentally flipped his canoe when she crashed into him.
• Ethan Nakamura, she became friends with him once when they were both put on border patrol in a game of capture the flag, they found out that they fought pretty well together when they ended up fighting some kids in the Ares cabin that were trying to get across he lake to steal their flag. [Well this just makes the friendship considering what happens to Ethan.]
• Enemies: Luke, Luke kidnapped her, Alexia and Callie when they sneaked into the Labyrinth. He tried to get them to join Kronos' army of half-bloods and when she refused he stabbed Alexia in the arm. Ever since then she has had a burning hatred towards him. [Well, he's dead.]

Personality
Positive traits:

• Jennie tries to be as polite as she possibly can be, because she was raised that way by her father.
• She is very honest, and loyal to her friends, because she has 'issues' due to the fact that for a large part of her life she thought her mother abandoned her, so it was rooted into her brain to never abandon her loved ones [Good explanation]
• Stands up for what she believes in.
• Strong-minded.

Negative traits:

• Stubborn.
• Always says exactly what is on her mind.
• Thinks she knows better than everyone else, and she wont listen unless proven wrong.

Fears/Phobias: She was always Nyctophobic since she watched Friday the 13th at the age of 4 one night when she turned the TV on because she couldn't sleep.
[Why on earth would anyone watch that god-forsaken movie?]
She became Claustrophobic when she was caught in a car-crash that killed Kira, when the car flipped and she was stuck.

Fatal Flaw: Stubborn, thinks she is always right, doesn't easily accept opinions opposite of her own.
She is also usually correct due to her love of learning things that she think will turn out being useful to her. When she was younger her dad always said that she can never be wrong and called her his 'little genius'.
[Well.]

Combat-related questions
Camp: Half-Blood
Weapon of choice: Her weapon of choice is a sword.
She has a celestial bronze sword (Xiphos), the blade is 60 cm long.

The handle is a deep purple dyed leather, and the blade has fire designs carved into it. It doesn't fold or morph into anything magically but she uses the mist to make it look like an aluminum baseball bat with a purple handle.
Jennie got the Hephaestus cabin to make it for her.

Other weapons: Likes to use throwing knives. Pretty good at it too.
Bow and arrow. Not preffered but good at it.
[*preferred]

Powers and Abilities: Mystiokinesis: She can cast and control magic, not very good at it, but she manages from time to time.
Control over the mist: Can do it up to a point, not as good as Hazel.

Backstory:
Jennie grew up in the upper class, with maids and tutors. Her father worked a lot as a hotel manager, but he always made time to hang out with Jennie.

He knew that someday he'd have to give Jennie to camp half-blood, so he tried to spend as much time as he could with her.
Then when Jennie was around 6 years old, her father got married to a woman named Kira.
Jennie at first hated Kira, she constantly played pranks that ended up with Kira either having something ruined or injured. When Jennie was 8 her father punished her severely for putting blue dye in the shower head right before Kira took a shower to go out on a date with him on their anniversary.
She apologized to Kira and promised to try to get to know her.
[Okay that's cute]

Then the day of her 12th birthday finally arrived.
Her father had taken his whole family to up-state New York with him on a business trip, Jennie only went with the promise that he would take her out to dinner.
Kira was taking her to a near-by shopping mall to buy a dress for her birthday dinner. Suddenly an empousai attacks the car they were in, resulting in a car crash which killed the driver and Kira. Jennie survived and ran into the woods, where an aura found her and led her to camp half-blood.

She still sends and receives letters from her father, but she's too scared to visit him, thinking that going near him may result in a monster killing him.

She also has a history of arson in the camp. She set the Demeter cabin on fire when she was trying to cast a curse on a camper from the Demeter cabin after he pushed her in the lake, but it was put out before it got out of control.
[Ah, well, that makes sense.]

Comments:
A lot better. Though one thing I wanted to see in the relationships is how they work together as friends (for those who were actually friends). Like, dynamics, how they joked, how their personalities complement and contradict. Besides that, good job.

New Final judgement: Elysium

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