The Original Character Court

[Hi! So it's Laurel. Yay! Kara's in the bathroom and, well, she'll be in there for a while because reasons. So onto the review!]

Basics
Name: Opal Fowl
Age: 13
Gender: Female
Ethnicity: British
[I'm puh-retty sure that British is a nationality and not an ethnicity.]
Hair color: Red with streaks of turquoise
[Um... A teensy bit impractical if you're a demigod because those make you super obvious. But wow, 13 and hair's already dyed like that. Hmmm... You're gonna have to rethink that.]
Eye color: Opal
[Opal isn't a color... An opal stone can be pink, white, black, whatever.]
Height: 5 foot
Weight: 80 pounds
[Your character is borderline healthy and underweight.]
Other physical descriptions: Very lean and agile
Sexual orientation: Heterosexual

Personality
Positive traits: Very positive and tries to keep promises. Good at making friends.
[Is it just me or the last three OCs have almost the Will go to any means to keep the worst and most meaningful secrets (This doest sound like a fatal flaw but she will go to to any means like killing herself) exact same personality types? And they're all made by the same person who's identity will still remain a secret.]

Negative traits: Grows increasingly agitated when her decisions and choices are questioned.
[Uh... Yeah. This is some variation of the others. Kara and I should probs put a chapter with different personality types.]

Other Personality traits: Very mysterious.
[Wow. (sarcasm)]

Fears/Phobias: Achluophobia
[Fear of the dark. Okay. That's an inherent thing.]

Fatal Flaw: Will go to any means to keep the worst and most meaningful secrets (This doesn't sound like a fatal flaw but she will go to to any means like killing herself)
[It does sound fatal. Okay, You can probs work with this one!]

Family and Background
Godly Parent: Iris
Mortal Parent: John Alexander Fowl
[I was wondering why the name sounded familiar and now I know. Did you get Opal from Opal Koboi and Fowl from Artemis Fowl?]
Other relationships: Jaden Samson-Boyfriend
[Um... okay. So Jaden is 11. This girl is 13. Age-wise it sounds okay. Maturity-wise? NO. JUST NO. WHY? WHY WOULD YOU DO THIS? THEY'RE NOT MATURE ENOUGH. THIS RELATIONSHIP WILL GO DOWN IN FLAMES.]
Backstory: She lived with her father for most of her life in a mansion until monsters attacked and her father knew to send her to camp half-blood but he didn't know how. Soon a satyr came and took her to camp half blood where she trained until she started to get nightmares where a dark figure is slowly draining all the color from the world. Every day the color in the camp draind until the realize that it is also get rapidly colder every night.
So she goes on a quest with Jaden Samson and other campers)
[Kind of ????]

Combat-related questions
Camp: Half-Blood
Weapon of choice: Shiny Silver/celestial bronze dagger that can create color creations of objects and people (its from iris just go with it)
[color creations? No, I can't just go with it. What do you mean "color creations"? And why did Iris give it to her? Gods don't always give gifts to their kids. And what's the material, really? Silver and celestial bronze? Silver is kind of a Hunters of Artemis-exclusive thing. At least, that's what was implied.]
Powers and Abilities: Controls colors and can drain and create it at will
[What purpose will that serve? I know Iris is goddess of the rainbow. But that isn't exactly something her powers do. Anyway, Follow MrJoker20's "The Book of Olympus". He pretty much gives a rundown on what the possible demigod powers are. He hasn't put up Iris yet but if you want to know ASAP, just leave a comment on our thing which is called "References and Chracter Advice".]

Comments:
Yeah. Your characters need a lot of work. If you want examples, please look at the characters we listed under "Isles of the Blessed".

Final judgement: Fields of Punishment

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