Submitted by: Constrictor
Basics
Name: Shane Wilson
[Sounds a lot like Slade Wilson. Y'know, Deathstroke. Unless you're actually going for Deadpool as in Wade Wilson. Here's to hoping that the name was actually a coincidence.]
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Birthday: 5-3-97
Ethnicity: American
Hair color: Sandy blonde, brown highlights
Eye color: Navy blue
Other physical descriptions: Shane has a bunch of scars on his knuckles, from his attempts to enter his house. His parents had locked him out when he was ten,
[Why?]
and he wanted desperately to get in. He kept pounding his fists against the wooden door, until his step-dad would open it.
Height: 5'9"
Weight: 150 lbs
[Healthy ratio]
Sexual orientation: Heterosexual
Godly parent: Hermes
Mortal parent: Britney Wilson
Other relationships:

• Shane is an only child, no siblings.
• His best friend is named Aaron Fox. He met Aaron on the streets, and stood up to a gang who was threatening Aaron. They were best friends since. However, Aaron is a mortal.
• His enemy is anyone who wants him dead.
  [Naturally]
  People who he left, instead of finishing business with them. The Hermes cabin doesn't like him much, because he's brash and usually harsh.
  [Yikes. The Cabin that likes to prank people.]

Personality
Positive traits: Shane is very helpful and stealthy. He's used to sneaking around, and is extrmeley good with helping people. He is also a very good fighter. Older kids would pick on him, so he began to learn how to fight.

Negative traits: Shane does anything for money. He usually was on the streets, and needed a way to get money. So he has a quote, "I do good things for money, and I do bad things for money." He does what ever it takes to earn money. So he's mostly good/bad. He also has a temper, but your lucky to witness it, because usually he's calm.
[Ah. So he's loyal to money. This could be interesting]

Fears/Phobias: Shane doesn't fear anything, he's kind of a free-spirited guy. However, if he was to face his parents he'd be terrified.
[Why?]

Fatal Flaw: Anger.
[Hmmm...]
Shane had bad things happen to him, and so he wants to do bad things to the people who hurt him. He uses his anger to win his fights, usually killing his attacker. He calls his angry side, his Monster. So in battle he'll usually say, "Don't let the Monster come out."
["You don't wanna see me angry." :)) This is actually an interesting flaw.]

Combat-related questions
Camp: Half-Blood
Weapon of choice: Shane uses two samauri swords,
[First off, they're samurai swords. Second, he's a Greek demigod. Why do people like giving their OCs Asian weapons? They don't fit the environment. Third, this is definitely a Wade Wilson wannabe. You couldn't have made it more obvious.]
they are long and black,
[Yeah. Definitely Deadpool. Also, you don't have to say that katanas are "long" because katanas have a standard size. I would know. I have one.]
and he usually wears them on his back, in a double sheath. He had stolen them from a museum in New Jersey.
Other Weapons: A gray pistol that shoots normal bullets. He obtained it from a gang member who owed him money. He uses it agaidnt mortals, but only those he needs to deal with. He gets ammo from a local gun shop in New York City.
[*snorts* This is Deadpool.]
Powers and Abilities: Shane is extremely stealthy and travels fast, thanks to his dad Hermes. He uses many of his dad's skills for his own use.
[Still Deadpool]

Backstory:
Shane was physically and sexually abused as a kid. He desperately wanted attention from his parents, and couldn't stand being alone. His dad once tied him to a chair and would tazor him every time he cried.
[Taiser]
At age Thirteen, Shane left and began his life on the streets of Detroit. People would ask him to do things, such as deleiver drugs or watch their things.
[Deliver]
In return, he'd earn money. Sadly, sometimes his dealer would set him up, and he'd end up beaten up and unconisouss in an alley way, bankrupt. At age fifteen he began stealing from small stores, and shoplifting for money. After two years, a manticore had found him. He was bleeding, and laying on the street. Luckily, another demigod saw him
[Who?]
and helped him to Camp Half-Blood. Shane doesn't obey rules, and hates being commanded or controlled. He usually travels around, and vists camp often.

Comments:
Your OC is Deadpool. The only original stuff here's the backstory, the parents' name, relationships, but even that's lacking, like a lot. The weapons. Unbelievable.

Remove everything Deadpool related. Change the weapons for Chrissakes! Make them more appropriate! Also, spell-check.

Final Judgement: Fields of Punishment

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