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On the streets

Chapter 11

Dreams suck. Especially if your a demigod. Especially if the dream sucks for a demigod dream. Well, one of those sucky demigod dreams? I just had one.
It started from when Calypso pushed me on the raft. She saw me leave, but as soon as I left, a giant person came. The voice bellowed:
"I am Chaos, and I'm here to make some Chaos, you know cause I'm Chaos. Tell me the whearabouts of Leo Valdez an the crew of the argo two, and I will spare you."
"No" Calypso shouted Back defiantly. "Why would I ever tell you, you little muthatitan."
"So be it" Chaos was like a drama queen. Pratty and such a little ------ (Sorry technical difficulties).
Chaos burnt everything on the island. Her home, her garden, every tree. Soon, nothing was left except a barren island. Then, he grabbed a protesting, cursing, yelling Calypso, and dissapered.
I woke with a start.
"Leo are you okay" said hazel.
"We have to go find Calypso. NOW."

Notes

Comments

@ivenomeansbywhichtodefend
Thank you for the critique and your right, after not seeing this for a while I realize that this is true. (Sorry I took so long to reply)

I really really like your story and the way it's going, but I am going to critique a little. You need to slow down a bit. You've got all these ideas jumbled into your head, and you're writing them so fast that a lot of the detail which makes it flow isn't getting in. But I really like the direction this is heading! I'm really excited to read more like bouncing in my seat kind of excited

Nice

Constrictor Constrictor
1/23/16

I love it please update

Kat1st Kat1st
11/28/15

This is good as!

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11/26/15