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On the streets

Chapter 7

There was a golden man, like the golden man. It was Chrysaor. On the bright side, for the first time in forever (No, I will not make a Frozen Parody!) It wasn't looking for me! But the problem was that he was looking for Allie.
"I believe that you have something that belongs to me" Chrysaor said.
"And I believe that you have something that belongs to me" Allie called.
"Well" Chrysaor said "what can I say, I'm a pirate, I loot and pillage."
"You can be a pirate" Allie was getting angry "Just not a good one. What type of pirate gets looted and pillage by a 15 year old? Especially an immortal pirate?"

Notes

Comments

@ivenomeansbywhichtodefend
Thank you for the critique and your right, after not seeing this for a while I realize that this is true. (Sorry I took so long to reply)

I really really like your story and the way it's going, but I am going to critique a little. You need to slow down a bit. You've got all these ideas jumbled into your head, and you're writing them so fast that a lot of the detail which makes it flow isn't getting in. But I really like the direction this is heading! I'm really excited to read more like bouncing in my seat kind of excited

Nice

Constrictor Constrictor
1/23/16

I love it please update

Kat1st Kat1st
11/28/15

This is good as!

Go_chase_a_Donut Go_chase_a_Donut
11/26/15