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On the streets

Chapter 8

Okay, that's just great. Because Allie has just as big of a sass mouth as Percy, a golden pirate man that has kidnapped and tied up just about every member of the ship is raiding us, and of course we have to quickly make up a plan to escape and keep some peoples sass mouth shut.
Yep, just another average day in the demigod life.
Anyway, Percy is there, with a blank expression on his face, Annabeth is using her super powered Athena brain, Jason's there about to start a storm and I'm just-Leo.
"I don't know what pirate does that" Chrysaor answered quickly "That must be a horrible pirate."
"Well that explains a lot about you" Allie answered.
"Yeah, definitely not me" Chrysaor answered. "See, a fifteen year old did scare off my crew, but what scared me off was her mother, the goddess Athena. And I see you have made some new friends? Need them to help you?"
"Hey" Allie said defensively "I need help to defeat you. You, well you need mental help. Seriously? welcome to modern day. Go back to the olden ages, oh wait, you arent smart enough to figure out the Tardis."
Percy stepped forward. "Come on Chrysaor, we all know what she just said was true. And at least we don't have a crew that easily gets scared off by diet coke"
Everyone laughed.
"Fine" Chrysaor called back He went to his ship.
As soon as he dissapered everyone went back to their business.
As soon as the ship left, what we then saw was worse then a golden pirate. Something that would sure kill us off. All of us.

Notes

Comments

@ivenomeansbywhichtodefend
Thank you for the critique and your right, after not seeing this for a while I realize that this is true. (Sorry I took so long to reply)

I really really like your story and the way it's going, but I am going to critique a little. You need to slow down a bit. You've got all these ideas jumbled into your head, and you're writing them so fast that a lot of the detail which makes it flow isn't getting in. But I really like the direction this is heading! I'm really excited to read more like bouncing in my seat kind of excited

Nice

Constrictor Constrictor
1/23/16

I love it please update

Kat1st Kat1st
11/28/15

This is good as!

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11/26/15