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On the streets

Chapter 4

Allie and I have been jumping around from foster home to foster home for a few year. With the usual monster attack-you know typical demigods. Anyway, one day, we were traveling to California, right at the coast. Thats when things started to go wrong for us. We were running along the coast, because a pirate was chasing us. All of a sudden he grabbed Allie. "Leo" she called. I grabbed her arm, but it was no good. After a round of tug-a-Allie, the pirate grabbed her, and took her on a ship. I never saw her again.
Soon a bus arrived. A man with wispy hair and a baseball bat stepped out and said
"where are your parents"
"I, I" I stammered "I don't have any"
"well than" the man said. "Welcome to the wilderness school.

Notes

This is not the end yet!!!

Comments

@ivenomeansbywhichtodefend
Thank you for the critique and your right, after not seeing this for a while I realize that this is true. (Sorry I took so long to reply)

I really really like your story and the way it's going, but I am going to critique a little. You need to slow down a bit. You've got all these ideas jumbled into your head, and you're writing them so fast that a lot of the detail which makes it flow isn't getting in. But I really like the direction this is heading! I'm really excited to read more like bouncing in my seat kind of excited

Nice

Constrictor Constrictor
1/23/16

I love it please update

Kat1st Kat1st
11/28/15

This is good as!

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11/26/15