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On the streets

Chapter 5

Well thats the end of the story. It kinda makes me sad to talk about it. Really it does. Allie was the best friend I could ever have, maybe even better than Piper and Jason. I will never forget her.
"boom". Wait what was that rumbling, please dont be another monster attack, I just fixed the ship.

I walked up the stairs, and as soon as I get up, a young girl, about 15 or 16 jumps out and puts a golden sword to my neck. Everyone stared at me. Percy and Jason got out their weapons but I told them "wait, don't", and they took a cautious step forward.

Even though she was dressed in beautiful piratess clothes, a pirate hat, leggings, and had her hair in a braid that went down her shoulder, I still recognized her. I recognized her playful smile, her startling eyes, and her casual mess. I recognized a 8 year old jumping on me and warning me to get up. I recognized a girl with enough courage to throw that knife at that monster. I recognized the girl, loyal and always at my side.





The pirate girl was Allie.

Notes

Comments

@ivenomeansbywhichtodefend
Thank you for the critique and your right, after not seeing this for a while I realize that this is true. (Sorry I took so long to reply)

I really really like your story and the way it's going, but I am going to critique a little. You need to slow down a bit. You've got all these ideas jumbled into your head, and you're writing them so fast that a lot of the detail which makes it flow isn't getting in. But I really like the direction this is heading! I'm really excited to read more like bouncing in my seat kind of excited

Nice

Constrictor Constrictor
1/23/16

I love it please update

Kat1st Kat1st
11/28/15

This is good as!

Go_chase_a_Donut Go_chase_a_Donut
11/26/15