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On the streets

Chapter 6

"What the heck" Percy yelled he grabbed his pen riptide out of his pocket and charged for her.
Jason did the same and he flipped his coin.
"Wait" I yelled, "Put the weapons away"
Allie grabbed my hand and pulled me up, and after about 5 seconds, she turned on me and shoved me.
"Okay" Annabeth announced "Lets stop playing tackle the Leo. Who is she Leo?
"Um" I started
"I think I should be able to introduce myself" Allie interrupted.
"Go ahead" Annabeth called
With all the bouncing, we woke up Nico, Piper, Hazel and Frank and the three came bounding up from their cabins downstairs.
"Wha, What the" Frank stuttered
"Great more company" Allie grumbled
"This is Allie" I said cheerfully "She is going to introduce herself"
"My name is Allison Johnson, but you can call me Allie. I am a daughter of Athena.."
"A daughter of Athena?" Annabeth asked. Oh boy, its gonna take a while to get these two to get along.
"Yes" Allie continued "A daughter of Athena. Anyway as I was saying, when I was four, I ran away from home. It was either that or suicide, and I'm still not ready to die. Most of you may think I'm stubborn, but the reason I did it was no one cared. NO ONE. I was bullied by almost everyone at school, at home, I was treated like I was invisible. I couldn't stand it. The last straw was the spiders, but I don't need to mention that. I was living in many different alleyways. Bouncing from orphanage to orphanage. Around the time I was seven, I met this scrawny kid named.."
"Leo" I interrupted
"Thanks for the input" Allie glared at me "that's what we need . Now can you please shut the heck up?"
A few laughs went around, and even Annabeth managed a smile.
"At first" Allie continued "He was the most annoying kid on earth. Actually I think he still is. Anyway, I met him at this one orphanage, where I could have sworn the worker was evil. Every time I looked at him, he turned into this monster, and he was always glaring at me, and Leo, when he came. We were seven, and we didn't know anything. I'm smarter now, but I don't think Leo is but oh well. We ran away, getting chased after. After that we spent our lives bouncing from orphanage to orphanage

Notes

Comments

@ivenomeansbywhichtodefend
Thank you for the critique and your right, after not seeing this for a while I realize that this is true. (Sorry I took so long to reply)

I really really like your story and the way it's going, but I am going to critique a little. You need to slow down a bit. You've got all these ideas jumbled into your head, and you're writing them so fast that a lot of the detail which makes it flow isn't getting in. But I really like the direction this is heading! I'm really excited to read more like bouncing in my seat kind of excited

Nice

Constrictor Constrictor
1/23/16

I love it please update

Kat1st Kat1st
11/28/15

This is good as!

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11/26/15