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Honour and sacrifice

Intro- dont find it boring please

Hello. Or, goodbye because in 6 months I'm gonna die from an explosion. However I think you should know my name is Benjamin Hurl. My friends call me a hero, cause in exactly 3 minuets I am going to save 17 campers from 3 hellhounds that came out of nowhere. I guess you should hear my story.


"Ben look out!" Phoebe calls to me when a really ugly monster shoot fire at me. I duck and roll to the side, bringing a bronze cloth from my pocket a ripping it in two, both scraps transforming into two celestial bronze weapons, a magnificent sword and shield. I stalked toward the monster, extending my sword in front of me. In a quick jab from my weapon, the monster disintegrated. "Help! Ben!" I heard Phoebe scream. I glanced at her and a wave of anguish washed over me. A hellhound had her pinned to a tree, looming over her and gnashing its teeth. I did the only thing I could think of-I threw my sword. It hit the hellhound square on the shoulders and it froze, looking confused. I sighed with relief, but I was weaponless. Phoebe mouthed a thank you and retrieved my sword. "ROOOAAUUUGGHHH!" And out came three hellhounds. The slashed at low-hanging branches, knocking demigods here and there. Suddenly, one lunged at me, and the world went black.
I watched in horror as Ben flew backwards. His head collided with a hard rock and he was knocked out cold. "Phoebe, look out!" I heard the warning to late. A hellhound slashed at my face and blood sprayed in my eyes. I came to my senses and fought like a hurricane, striking, 'CLASH', parrying and thrusting. Suddenly Ben was beside me, fighting equally to me. Suddenly there was a scream beside us. Ben and I risked a glance, and the hellhounds did too. The two remaining monsters abandoned us and raced to another hellhounds side. Where did they all come from? We chased after them, and were greeted by 17 demigods trapped between the three hellhounds. Then, Ben climbed a tree faster than a squirrel, plucked a big rock from the branches,(used as ambush weapons for demigod guards if monsters attack)and threw it with great strength onto the nearest hellhound. He hurled rocks faster and faster, and I watched, amazed, as monsters disintegrated before me. Soon the battle was one and monsters fled into the woods. "B-Ben y-y-your a hero!" I managed to say. He jumped down beside me and wrapped me in a hug. "I'm so glad your alive!" He whispered in my ear. I relaxed and hugged him back. I was so proud of him.

Notes

EEENNNNJJJJOOOYYYYY! It's kinda action packed! :#

Comments

@Constrictor
Sorry I kinda thought about the "one second knocked out and the next fighting" I doesn't seem so realistic:)

Nice idea, :) you have a good flow to things. However, I find it confusing how everything plays out. You kept switching point of views and one second Ben was knocked out and the next he was fighting again. It certainly seems exciting, but I just had to recommend that. It's kind of confusing to understand what is happening, so try re-reading it and adding more details. But good job on the story. xD

Constrictor Constrictor
2/24/15

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